Wednesday, April 30, 2008

maybe i'll even list you all as editors. :)

nate hulne is graciously creating a new coffee shop website for me. i'm working on some content for the pages, and i just took all of two minutes to write up a history of the business. i know that it needs some work (which is why i'm not sending it to him yet), and i'd love to get some feedback. i know so far we've mostly just been patting each other on the back and giving words of encouragement (which, p.s., has been good for my writing ego), but i'm actually asking for some critisism on this one. and it won't even hurt my feelings because i haven't even read through what i just wrote. (see how that means i can take less offense? because it all makes sense in my head!) so have at it....


Once upon a time, a girl in her late teens semi-flippantly said she would one day like to own a coffee shop. But then she went on to college, got her four year degree in English, and landed a fabulous part-time job at a library. After a few months, she began to feel a burning desire to do something more with her life. The idea of a coffee shop seemed the perfect amount of ambitious and fun. With the support of her husband, family, and friends, she decided to move forth with the plan.

The Altoona Pub was purchased, and months of renovation began. Coffee equipment was bought, paint was painted, and the girl realized she better quickly learn a thing or two about espresso. (Her palette had long ago been trained to taste a good drink, but she didn’t actually know how to MAKE one!) She happened upon Carl at The Coffee Barn (ß a link here would be fabulous!), ordered some flavoring, decided on a name (thanks to her big brother, Brad), and soon after the doors opened. (Well, some of the more boring details have been left out, but you get the picture.) Ever since that wonderful day in June of 2004, Being There Coffee House has been making Altoona-ites and anyone else who graces it’s door very, very satisfied coffee drinkers.

2 comments:

Breona (with love) said...

i just took a quick glance at this... i might write more later if i remember :D

the second sentence i'd just use then and take out the but.

second to the last sentence in the first paragraph-- ambitious should be ambition :D

last sentence "it's" should be "its"

Alison said...

I second Breona's suggestions. I was going to write more, but then I started writing a lot more, so I ended up just sending you an email.